Monday, November 3, 2008

Critique - Monster

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Looking good, nice progress!

I think you could slow down the hand ground pounding by maybe 2 frames, which will make him look bigger. But without a tree or little humans around it's tough to know what the real scale is. What could be cool is to have a little guy run away from him. Don't shake your head, hear me out! :)

Look at x5, tilt the big guy's head a little bit so he's looking at the ground. Hold on. Let me draw it. (see attachment). So he's looking at a little guy running away (quick'n dirty runcycle). That way we introduce some motivation for the monster and some context.

Then with the spear (which then could be a little bit shorter) another guy is saving the little guy and distracting the monster. Continue with what you have though. Just make the transition between poses a bit more fluid. Right now it feels a bit too pose-to-pose.

Hope that helps!
Cheers
JD

2 comments:

jim said...

I wonder what it would look like if the hips dip down as it moves screen right (after getting hit with the arrow). Might add some weight to that motion... and it could even turn into a kind of figure 8 (down/right, slight up recovery, back left and down as he pulls the arrow out).

Jean-Denis Haas said...

Absolutely, nice catch! Thanks!